Sunday, March 10, 2013

A Teaser for my fans!

     Naoko looked thoughtfully at the viewscreens, then compared the data streaming through her proteus. It was mind-boggling to think that the whole of Humanity, the scope and stretch that was her race, had come from a single planet, in a single solar system. It was unthinkable. The rationalist inside her denied the very real proof that were Latelian history files; though much of her own planet's history had been lost across five thousand years of war and dissemination by the 'great and wise Chair', documentation chronicling the expansion of Mankind across the stars was more cohesive in Latelyspace than in any other system in the Universe.
     The only being to know more was the Trinity AI, and as Garth would say, "It ain't sayin' shit about nothin."
     A single world. Countless trillions of men, women and children, spread across a literal fathomless depth of planets, asteroids, space stations and other forms of habitat too bizarre to even contemplate.
     "Looks like a dead apple, don't it?" Greuz asked from the co-pilot's chair. He'd gotten used to surrendering most of his authority to the young Miss fairly quickly on, and, truth be told, the old captain would admit that the girl had gotten his unruly crew onto a track that he'd been wishing to follow for some time.
     "Or a dead dog's arse." Seta muttered sullenly, rubbing the nub where the tip of a finger used to be. She could still feel the whole finger, and it was driving her mad. They'd had to chop the end off.
     "One world." Naoko shook her head. The majesty of it all. The horror of what 'Earth' had become.
According to Greuz, who'd somehow managed to stay in the employ of Jordan Bishop longer that was mathematically possible, the Trinity AI insisted that all the big players in Human Commerce remain on the planet until the stars themselves died. That had massive Conglomerates like BishopCo, Tynedale/Fujihara, Voss_Uderhell and others chained to the dying rock like prisoners.
     And, like prisoners, fat, rich, obscenely wealthy and unconscionably powerful prisoners, they rebelled. They wanted freedom that the poorest and most basic of commoners owned, the freedom to set foot on new ground in strange solar systems, they wanted the right to shift their power bases away from murderous friends and devious enemies.
     Since they could not have that, they continued to poison their world, to destroy their land, to suffocate everyone and everything around them in the hopes that, like Greuz's dead apple, one day, the world would slough off it's skin and Trinity would be forced to allow the powerful their freedoms.
     Alligorni scratched his jaw. He'd never been this close to Trinity Prime. Frankly, it made his balls sweat. He'd tried convince the others to shift Naoko to another cruiser in Bishop's employ. Well, okay, he'd spent roughly three seconds trying, failing after a claustrophobic and panicky silence had literally erupted from the other crewmembers.
     Trinity Prime.
     Alli'd grown up with horror stories of the madness that roiled under the skin. The Mad Goth King Blake lived in his even madder Arcade City, running his citizens through an endless gauntlet of endurance, pain and madness, forcing them to look up into the heavens, not at a sky, but a bizarre clockwork dome of brutal mechanics whenever they sought freedom. Alli could trace his lineage back six hundred years, and there was FrancoBritish blood pumping in his veins.
     What if that Mad King called to him?
     Worse still was the EuroJapanese Dome. Like the King's only forged from energy, the Emperor's Dome kept everything and everyone out. No one knew what happened on the other side of the impenetrable glistening field. Men and women, penitents and parishioners to the word of the Eternal Emperor came and went all the time, but never said anything about what they'd seen, what they'd heard, what they'd learned.
     In his time as a pirate and kidnapper, actually, in all their times, every man and woman aboard the Zhivago had run into both FrancoBrits and EJ's direct from their motherlands, and of the two, Alli'd rather talk to one of the stone cold killers from Arcade City than the blank-eyed gossamer servants of the Emperor.
     You could feel the terror and madness survivors of the King's predations lived with, day in, day out. You could look into their eyes and understand that they'd been through something few beings could handle.
     When you talked to someone who'd held audience with Emperor for Life, they had no idea what they'd seen. And they didn't care. They'd seen their leader, a being divine and wondrous. Or so they said.
     Alli usually wound up killing anyone who'd met the Emperor. Talking to them made it feel like his brain was sliding out his ear.
     A panel at Greuz's shoulder beeped. He read the information over. "We have docking permission. BishopCo Tower Alpha." He sent the data over to Naoko.
     Naoko nodded. "Take us in if you would, Captain Greuz?"

Wednesday, August 22, 2012


Editing is my least and most favorite thing.

Why is it my least favorite? Because I get to see how many times I use the word 'that' in a single damned sentence. Because I run across multiple instances of words that I, for whatever reason, fell completely in love with. As an example, for my last book, Subversive Elements, I used the word 'perfidy' on nearly every single page. In order to correct the problem, I was sometimes forced to rewrite entire paragraphs. Other times, it's phrases. I can't think of any off the top of my head, but one of my favorite writers uses 'it was the easiest thing in the world to...' and various permutations in every one of his books, even in different genres. Still love the guy, though.

It's my most favorite thing because ... because. The act of writing isn't the same as reading. Writing is a feverish attempt (at least for me) to get what is in my brain out on the page. sometimes that means I say the same thing eighteen different times across three pages. Editing is the closest to reading my own material before I get to the absolute final, master copy. It's a blast. I come across sentences or nuggets of wisdom that make me laugh, or tear up, or cheer. Is it narcissitic? You bet it is, but I am my own biggest fan. Hell, I gave the first iteration of Foreign Devil 5 out of 5 stars when I should've given it a 2, and only then because I spelled my name mostly right on the cover.

Editing takes longer because it requires more thinking, something those of you who know me personally know doesn't come all that easy. Most of the time my brain is preoccupied with pop culture and other unrelated things, so buckling down and asking myself to look at each and every sentence in 80 different ways is something I can only do for so long every day before said brain goes 'need foods, need sleep, stop now'.

Hell, I've reread each paragraph of this blog entry at least 3 times over and have changed three words already.

I'm about 1/4 of the way through the first round of edits. If I am stupendously lucky and dilligent, I may only need to do two rounds. Anything after that is likely to be me, being nitpicky as all get out.

Stay tuned, fan(s)!

Saturday, July 14, 2012

I am a Terrible Blogger

I know, I know, I'm sure I say this all the time, but I really am a terrible blogger. About the only justification I have is that I spend most of my spare time working on Citizen Pariah. For those of you who aren't a fan of me on Facebook, rest assured, the story is coming along quite nicely. I just broke 210k words and am working slavishly to complete the last quarter of the story.

I appreciate your patience and understanding, especially when it comes to updating this blog.

Tuesday, January 3, 2012

Sample of New Chapter for Foreign Devil!

Hi there, everybody! Thank you for being so patient! For those of you who are interested, here is a sample of the revised opening for Foreign Devil:

Jerszak Senfell loved driving his bus through the bustling metropolis of Tenerek’s main city, Arturii. It was an easy route, and most of the people who caught his bus did so every day the whole year through. He’d made some good, solid friendships with the men and women who rode his route. He’d even met his future wife during a shift and against regulations, had asked her to marry him while stopped at the long red light. She’d said yes, of course, and the entire bus had cheered him on.
What a wonderful day that’d been. Just about the best day Jerszak could ever remember. The bus driver -a little long in the tooth, a little gray in the hair, a little round in the belly- was holding on to that day with feverish attention. He hoped it’d keep him sane.
Today was nothing like that day.
Today, against regulations, Jerszak wasn’t even driving his own bus.
Today, a blue-eyed black haired maniac in a long coat was driving his bus and with such reckless abandon. It was a miracle the vehicle was still working.
“Y’know, Jerry … I can call you Jerry, right? Y’know, Jerry, this whole thing is seriously fucked up.”
Jerry winced as the driver started angling the bus towards oncoming traffic. Instinct said the man was going to try and take the corner onto Lefz, but it was less than fifty feet away and they were traveling nearly a hundred miles an hour. For some reason that boggled Jerry’s mind, his kidnapper was insisting that he follow the route, even though it seemed to be making escape from the police force right behind them more than a little difficult.
Jerry swallowed nervously and redoubled his grip on the bars. He didn’t know what the word ‘fucked’ meant, but it was easy to guess. “I … yes … taking me hostage is … is fucked up.”
The driver did something complicated involving all the brakes, the gear shifter and the steering wheel and against all rational thought and odds, the lumbering hulk that was the bus made an amazingly graceful turn onto Lefz, whereupon they picked up speed once more. He howled with laughter as a slew of brilliant purple police cars slammed into one another. “This? The hostage thing? No, that’s not the fucked up thing, Jerry. That’s normal. No, the fucked up thing is this future. It’s all wrong. Like, completely and totally wrong.”
Jerszak –who actually found he was thinking of himself as Jerry- frowned. “The … the future? I … that doesn’t make sense.” He was a bus driver, which meant that on slow days, or on days when nobody felt like talking, he had ample time for thought. Jerry was by no means a philosopher, but he’d been known to have a deep thought or two.
The rearview mirror showed the cops had reoriented and were back on the hunt. Jerry continued. “How can our future be wrong? How can you even know what the future is? Who are you?”
The blue-eyed maniac blinked. “Where are my manners? I’ve taken you hostage, we’re about to get into some pretty heavy shit here and I haven’t even told you who I am. My name, Jerry Seinfeld, is Garth N’Chalez, formerly a Mercenary Captain for The Special Services Branch of Trinity’s Military Engine.”
Though he’d been terrified from the moment Garth had politely informed him he and his bus was being taken hostage, Jerry was now absolutely petrified. He knew about Special Services. Everyone did. Special Services was the worst best-kept secret in all of Trinityspace; home of criminals, the insane and people who lived only to kill or die on planets on the other side of the impenetrable Cordon, soldiers who worked in SpecSer were legends. They did things and went places they couldn’t talk about.
Jerry stared at the thick hand shoved in his direction, trying as he did so to forget that his captor was now driving the bus with his knees. “Garth N… Nc …?”
Garth sighed. No one anywhere could pronounce his name. “Nickels. Okay? Just … Nickels is fine. Jesus.”
Jerry took Garth’s hand in his own because it seemed like that was what the man wanted. He did it for another reason too: hopefully it’d get him to put his hands back on the wheel. The bus driver had the distinct feeling that his captor was doing his best not to squeeze too hard, for which he was grateful; Garth’s hand felt as hard as steel.
Garth smiled sunnily. “Awesome. Now. I didn’t say our future. I said this future. Viewed from the outside looking in, everything that is, um, everything –like right now- is totally one hundred percent incorrect.” He looked in the rearview mirror. Six cop cars trailed their bus and one was trying to make its way beside them, presumably to shoot out the tires or shoot through the door. Not very sporting.
Against better judgment, Jerry opened his mouth. “That would make it the present, then.”
“Ahah!” Garth pointed a finger at the roof and abruptly lost control of the bus. It swerved to the left. The driver of the cop car sneaking its way up overreacted to the sudden motion and veered off into the side of a building. “You’d think so, right?” Garth grabbed hold of the wheel with both hands and started angling to make another high-speed turn.
“The present isn’t the present?” Whoever Garth Nickels was, he seemed to have a very tenuous grasp on time. “What is it then?”
Then, because they were going to take the turn onto Bliru at roughly a hundred fifty miles per hour, Jerry shut his eyes.
There followed a solid thirty seconds of cursing, crashing and squealing of tires. Jerry had never heard the word ‘fuck’ before today, but in those thirty seconds of testicle-shrinking terror he heard something on the order of seven thousand different ways of using it in a sentence, some of them requiring no additional words at all. A few more car crash sounds reached his ears and Jerry hoped that the policemen in those vehicles were okay.
“You can open your eyes, Jerry.” Garth waved when the driver did so. He cocked his head to one side, thoughtfully. “Can I trust you?”
“Sorry?” Jerry ignored the fact that Garth was driving with his knees again. The man seemed capable of driving with any part of his body, and with far greater skill than someone who’d used the same vehicle every day for the last fifteen years.
“Can I trust you? I mean, people talk to you all day long, right? Do you blab all the stuff they say to your wife the moment you get home, or do you keep it to yourself?”
At that moment, Jerry saw in Garth’s brilliant blue eyes an absolute need to talk to someone. For the rest of his days, Jerszak Senfell would remember wondering how any one human being could seem to be so alone in the middle of a police chase, or how, while being so alone, he could be having so much fun. “Absolutely, Garth. You can trust me.”
“Cool.” Garth nodded, satisfied. Then more firmly, “Cool. Okay. So. I was born something like thirty thousand years ago on a small blue-green planet called ‘Earth’. For some reason I can’t remember or even fucking understand, I put myself into suspended animation. I got woken up ten years ago, and even though I remember shit-all about the past, I can tell you with absolute clarity that this whole future is broken. You ever hear of a show called The Jetsons? No? It was a cartoon for kids, but in it, they had spaceships that could fold up into suitcases! Where are those, Jerry? We’re thirty thousand years into the future, man. How come we don’t have warp drive, Jerry? TV shows from my time had guys in glittering onesies traveling all over everywhere at Warp 10 and damn me if there’s no reason we don’t have that! Explain to me why there haven’t been any significant advances in anything in ever, Jerry! Oh,” Garth grinned sheepishly, “and um, I should warn you. Knowledge of my interment for thirty thousand years and, uh, my rank and previous association with Special Services is bound under Trinity Law and anyone announcing anything I say to anyone is, um, punishable by an awful lot of things that are detrimental to breathing. I can recite the applicable statutes, if you like.”
Jerry automatically filed most of what Garth had just said away as the ramblings of a madman, choosing to focus on the one –to his mind- salient aspect of the man’s rant. “You …” he whispered quietly, “you have to know why. Everyone knows why.”
Garth looked again the rearview mirror. “These guys are effing persistent, man.” He shook his head. “Say it, Jerry. Say it out loud. Don’t be afraid. Trinity isn’t here and isn’t going to hurt you.”
“The …The Dark Ages.”
Garth slammed on the breaks, yanked hard on the wheel, howling with laughter as the massive bus spun in a perfect hundred-eighty degree arc. He frowned apologetically as, at the tail end of the spin, the rear of his commandeered bus whacked a series of parked cars into motion. “Exactly, Jerry. The Dark Ages. A ‘universal and unpredictable event’ that sweeps across all of fucking creation, slamming everyone and everything back to, well, the goddamn Dark Ages!”
Throwing the bus into motion, Garth drove back the way they’d just come, waving cheerily at the stunned police officers.
Jerry wanted to weep but adrenalin and terror were keeping him mercilessly focused. Not only was he being held captive by a bona fide SpecSer madman, he was dealing with … he couldn’t even think of the right words. The Dark Ages, and the dread you felt … it was just something you learned to deal with. Focusing on it as Garth Nickels seemed to have done was … unwise. He opened his mouth to say something, but Garth interrupted.
“It doesn’t make sense, Jerry! I’ve been on hundreds of planets in thousands of systems across both Trinityspace and The Cordon. I’ve seen things you can’t imagine and done things you would swear were impossible. We have Quantum Tunnels that connect solar systems hundreds of trillions of light years apart. We have artificially intelligent minds running everything everywhere –not counting Trinity - and we have spread ourselves to virtually every corner of existence. Did you know that, right now, the Trinity AI has more than eight hundred Offworld species of sentient being contained within It’s own domain? Eight hundred!
“What does…?”
Garth rammed a police car out of the way as he interrupted Jerry. “Does this have to do with anything? It’s The Trinity Fucking AI, Jerry! It’s been in control of humanity and your expansion for thirty thousand years. It has the power and ability to create something like The Cordon, a massive intergalactic wall that keeps ravening hordes of mutated humans and … and talking cockroaches from wandering around messing our shit up. It has Enforcers under It’s control, and those guys can conquer solar systems all on their own and they don’t even have to pack a lunch! It can keep aliens with alien technology from leaving their own solar systems without permission and it can’t stop these Dark Ages? It can do anything It wants!”
“The … The Trinity AI is affected by The Dark Ages too. It says so.” Jerry winced as Garth drove another three cop cars off the road.
“Jerry, don’t go wobbly on me here. Think about it. I can accept the fact that these Ages happen. The evidence is overwhelming. I can even accept that Trinity prevents entire realms of scientific exploration from occurring to help forestall a coming Age because even though I hate the machine mind with a passion, It is nevertheless instrumental in keeping everyone breathing. If It were affected by The Dark Ages as badly as individual solar systems and planets are, we wouldn’t have made it past that first one. Did you know that after a Dark Age, whole bunches of old tech that used to work don’t anymore? How does that make sense? It doesn’t! Know what else doesn’t make sense?”
“I … I …” Jerry pointed out the front window. Policemen were standing on either side of the road with guns drawn.
“Don’t mind them, Jerry. Tenerekian standard-issue revolvers lack punching power. Your bus is bullet-proof.” Garth flipped a couple cops the bird and kept on driving. “Microchips, Jerry. Microchips thirty thousand years into the future don’t make any sense. This whole future doesn’t make any sense. Hell, me driving a bus and talking to you is weird. After this long, everyone everywhere should be talking balls of light or, uh, well … not needing a goddamn bus to get to work.”
“I get it now.” Jerry announced suddenly. “You’re being chased because of your views on the Trinity AI and The Dark Ages! You’re an agitator aren’t you? The Trinity AI wants to silence you! Don’t you know that talking about Dark Ages like this incites riots and panic in the streets? I’ve read stories about whole planets being swept up in anti-Age riots and hysteria. You should … you should give up.”
“Haha, what? No, man, Trinity loves me. First rate soldier, me. Did all kinds of fucked up shit for that machine mind. Trinity wouldn’t do anything to me unless I, like, wandered talking about Gorensworld or Tannhauser’s Gate … shit … forget I said that. I didn’t say that. I was talking about the weather.”
Jerry whimpered. “Then what … why … why are the police chasing you?”
“Oh that.” Garth shrugged. “No clue. Some cop pulled a gun on me about an hour ago and told me I was under arrest. I punched him out and ran away. Cue antics with stolen bus. This is fun, isn’t it? We’re having fun, right? I mean, I bet you never knew you could drive your bus this fast, right? And you’re learning about how the future is broken, so that’s got to count as interesting, at the very least.”
Jerry pointed out the window with a trembling finger.
“Well shit. Your bus isn’t bulletproof against machine guns, Jerry.” Garth shrugged. “I wonder what I did wrong. You probably wanna get off.” To oblige his unwilling guest, he drove up and pulled to a complete halt at the closest available bus stop.
Jerry got off as quickly as he could, turning to watch as Garth Nickels, ex-Mercenary Captain formerly of Special Services, sped up and basically aimed the bus at the squadron of machinegun wielding police officers.
The explosion was quite impressive. Pale and trembling, Jerry sat on the bench and waited for the police to come to him. While he did this, the ex-bus driver thought on what he was going to say. He certainly had no intention of mentioning anything that Garth had actually said; Jerry had little doubt revealing word one of what’d come out of the man’s mouth would see him locked up forever.
Garth sat and waited politely for the arresting officers to finish putting out the fire, humming the theme song to ‘The Greatest American Hero’ under his breath. He was out of sorts. He knew it. Ever since winning free of Special Services, ever since deciding to … do what he was going to try and do … he wasn’t feeling right in the head. The urges pushing him forward were … overwhelming.
A cop in a bright purple suit warily approached him, handcuffs at the ready. Garth rose and waited for the cop to stop crying. When all the tears were done, the ex-SpecSer turned around and laced his hands behind his back. “Look, man, I can’t cuff myself. Let’s get this over with.”
Backed by fifty cops armed with machineguns and rocket launchers, the arresting officer stepped forward and put the cuffs on.
“You guys owe me a new jacket.” Garth groused as he let himself be put into a paddy wagon. “This one is burned because you blew that bus up around my ears.”

Tuesday, November 8, 2011

Good news, everybody!

Hi gang!
     After an excessively long time (five months or so) I finally managed to complete the last big edit for Subversive Elements. Now I'm reading it on my trusty android phone with an eye towards cosmetic changes, spelling errors and dangling words. And that's it.
    Why did it take so long? Well, the story turned out to be much more complex than I was ever originally able to write, that's why. Going through the text, remembering ideas I'd discarded, showed me that there was a lot more to what I was trying to say than I could've managed before.The characters wound up becoming more ... alive ... and when that happens, dynamics change. Motivations bend and flex, and if they don't fit inside the framework of the story you're trying to tell, well, that sucks.
      A lot. Once that happens, the story needs to change or it dies. Happily, I'm older now, more mature, and so it wasn't a complete disaster. I managed to fix my problems, came to a stunning revelation about a facet I'd never really even considered exploring before and, in the middle of it all, figured out how to fix the atrocious beginning to Foreign Devil.
     Yes, you read that right. I, the author, hate the beginning to the first book. I always have. But that's going to change! Once I'm done reading SE, though, I'm taking a break to rest my weary head. Elder Scrolls V comes out this week and I'm going to be doing a lot of nothing. Garth Nickels and the rest can just hang out while my noggin decompresses.
     When a week (or two) has passed and I've not touched finger to keyboard other than to rant on FB or whatever, I'll fix the minor errors remaining in SE and patch Foreign Devil's beginning right the hell up. I'm pretty excited by the changes I've got in mind. 
     As an aside, I must thank Pearson Moore (or is it 'Kaylee'?) for his brutally honest review of Foreign Devil. For quite a while (and sometimes still), my nose gets out of joint over the whole thing, partly because I had to google a word and partly because I'm a writer. Bad reviews are ... bad. We're twitchy people at the best of times and even when we say 'criticize away, I don't care, nothing you can say will upset me', we're lying through our teeth and want you to say 'Holy shit, this is the best thing that was ever written and I'm comparing it to stuff not even written yet!'.
     So why am I thanking someone for a bad review? Honestly, it wasn't a terrible review. In the middle of everything there was praise, and I held on to that, and to be frank, most of the onus rest on me. Choosing to do a '4,5,6' storyline a la Star Wars was probably not the wisest of decisions, but again, I was stuck with the framework I'd laid down for myself. Pearson's (or Kaylee's) review forced me to reexamine Garth's motivations and essentially everything to do with the arc of the story I want to tell. It forced me to realize that, in trying to describe a dark-hearted man trying desperately to return to the good-hearted man he remembered, I may've been too successful in portraying him as an arrogant dick. It was intentional, yes, but ... I didn't want people to hate him. I wanted people to see the struggle and almost completely failed. Well, I can't go and rewrite the whole first book (mostly because I simply don't have the energy), but I can fix the first few chapters with an eye towards getting people to hold on for answers and assure everyone that the atrocities and maniacal behavior shown in Foreign Devil is (in my mind) rather handily explained in Subversive Elements.
      Where I thought I was proud of Foreign Devil, I shouldn't have been. I am proud of Subversive Elements. It explains much of why things happened as they did, and I can only hope the reader(s) who have the first one will join me for the second. 
     Here is the cover for the soon-to-be-released Subversive Elements:


Sunday, October 16, 2011


Okay, okay, so editing 'Subversive Elements' has officially become an albatross around my neck. What initially started out as a quick one-two-three has metamorphosed into an endlessly punishing effort. Following the horrible review of the first book, I decided to spell things out a little more clearly, which wound up forcing me to revision a few of the characters, which caused me to add more depth to others, which suggested changes to a major plot point, which gave me an idea how to work on the truly awful opening of Foreign Devil ... you see? you SEE? I was supposed to have Subversive Elements up months ago so I could work on getting a short story up to HADES EDGE for an anthology coming out next year, but I won't be able to.


I can only write one thing at a time, that's why! And since my 'voice' has changed considerably over the years, can you imagine how difficult it is to keep my new 'voice' out of the stuff I'm editing? It's damn near impossible! I keep wanting to veer off into James Mallory Murphy's first person point of view when I'm writing (mostly) third person omniscient. GAH!

Anyways. Yeah. Making my old stuff good is harder than writing good stuff right off the bat, just so you know.

thanks for listening!